fixing english version of the awareness concept

content/posts/awareness.en.md

@@ -25,40 +25,39 @@ capacities are limited there.
 
 At a Chaos Event many people will come together. These have
 different needs and are in their acting, feeling and thinking different and unique.
-different and unique.
 
 Considerate behavior among each other and the respect of personal boundaries
-boundaries should be a matter of course, but even at the event, situations can arise in which people
+should be guaranteed course, but even at the event, situations can arise in which people
-situations may arise at the event in which people are belittled or discriminated against
+situations may arise at the event in which people are belittled or discriminated against.
-or discriminated against. Harassment, sexism, racism, homophobia, bi- and transphobia, rejectionism
+Harassment, sexism, racism, homophobia, bi- and transphobia,
-Trans hostility, Ableism (discrimination against disabled people),
+Ableism (discrimination against disabled people),
 anti-Semitism, anti-gypsyism and classism (discrimination against poor or socioeconomically
-socioeconomically disadvantaged people) are not okay, even when they happen
+disadvantaged people) are not okay, even if they happen
-happen unintentionally.
+unintentionally.
 
 ## What is Awareness?
 
 Awareness work means sensitizing people to pay attention to themselves and others - especially to those who do not conform to social expectations. Discrimination and violations of personal boundaries are often unnoticed by the perpetrators, but very well known to the victims. Since the needs of those affected often remain invisible, we want to give them special support in taking these needs seriously and asserting them. Even what others may call "supposed trivialities" or try to explain away can hurt and affect and are therefore worth addressing.
 
-An important part of awareness is the recognition of the power of definition: Whether their own boundaries have been crossed is always decided exclusively by the person affected. Otherwise, the majority society often assumes the right to decide who is discriminated against and who is not. It is important to us that people who are otherwise not heard or taken seriously are also noticed.
+An important part of awareness is recognizing who has the right to define a transgression: Whether their own boundaries have been crossed is always decided exclusively by the person affected. Otherwise, the majority society often assumes the right to decide who is discriminated against and who is not. It is important to us that people who are otherwise not heard or taken seriously are also noticed.
 
 For us, this means: on the one hand, we support those affected to process situations they have experienced themselves. We offer a place for confidential discussions. We listen and, if necessary, help them to develop ways of dealing with the situation and thus strengthen their ability to act.
 
 On the other hand, if requested, we communicate with the persons from whom discrimination and transgressive behavior originates or originated. The goal here is the aforementioned awareness: to generate understanding and awareness of how and why one's own behavior has violated another person's boundaries. We confront the assaultive or violating behavior, not the person. The goal is to take responsibility for one's own behavior.
 
-When dealing with conflict, we are also available for facilitation or accompaniment.
+When dealing with conflict, we are also available for moderation or accompaniment.
 
 ## How we work
 
 The awareness team is there to help you especially when:
 
-- your personal boundaries have been violated,
+- your personal boundaries have been crossed,
 - you have been harassed or discriminated against,
-- you witness (personal or structural) discrimination,
+- you witness or experience (personal or structural) discrimination,
 - you feel uncomfortable and need a person to talk to.
 
 When you contact us, we usually first ask you what happened and what you need right now.
-and what you need right now. Maybe you already have concrete ideas about what
+Maybe you already have concrete ideas about what
 we can do. Depending on what you want, we can, for example:
 
 - come to you in conflict situations at the event and mediate.
@@ -69,8 +68,8 @@ we can do. Depending on what you want, we can, for example:
 
 
 You always decide for yourselves what is the best course of action for you - we will
-will not do anything against your will. It's okay if you don't want to talk about something
+not do anything against your will. It's okay if you don't want to talk about something,
-you don't want to or can't talk about. Every reaction, whether sadness, anger, despair,
+if you don't want to or can't talk about. Every reaction, whether sadness, anger, despair,
 speechlessness, ... is okay. 
 
 Disclaimer: The awareness team consists of people who are sensitized to awareness and have
@@ -92,8 +91,8 @@ What we would like to see from those interested:
 - Self-awareness and reflection (you know yourself and your limits).
 - Self-organization and reliability
 - Ability to work in a team and to deal with conflicts
-- empathy
+- Empathy
-- willingness to learn
+- Willingness to learn
 - Openness and the ability to listen
 - Sensitivity to discrimination including recognition of structural discrimination